The Official Writing Challenge
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Would be interesting with more specifics, if you know them, e.g. "the opulant registration desk was once the location of on the spot surgery"
09/20/05
There is much good to be said about this lovely analogy. Try to be more aware of apostrophe usage and word choice: it's/its then/than gurney's/gurneys alot/ a lot. These little things sometimes make the difference between a fair piece and a really good one.
09/20/05
Good analogies!
09/27/05
Brenda, I was judging for the hotel/motel challenge, and I really thought this entry had potential. I found it very interesting to read, and also loved the message. It just needs a little bit of editing and "tweaking" to make it very good. Be encouraged though - I enjoyed your article very much. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)