The Official Writing Challenge
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07/22/10
Great story, very touching.
Lovely story and written well, however Don and John seemed to change places often, so that I was unsure at the end whether it was Grandpa Don or John?
07/23/10
I really enjoyed your story...it always leave me
with a natural high when i read that people can be moved in their hearts to do something good for someone else. A pefect example of what Jesus does every day.
thanks for chance to read it!
07/23/10
You know it's a good story when you're left thinking,"But what happened NEXT?" Good premise for a book.
You have written a warm, tender story that was enjoyable to read.
07/24/10
What an enjoyable story! I kept wondering if the little boy was an angel in disguise,
at first.
07/25/10
Uplifting story. Should the captain have said he was glad Don called--as opposed to John? Nice job. :)
This is a very touching story, other than mixing up the names a bit, it had plenty of detail and was quite sentimental. It did seem to miss the topic a little, but then you never know. It's important to write what you feel God is calling you to write.
07/27/10
A nice tender hearted story about love in action.
tiny red ink: I think the paragraph that tells of Don's opening the door was a bit overworked--it felt belabored to me. Aside from that, I enjoyed this piece.