The Official Writing Challenge
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You make some wonderful points and picked an outstanding Bible passage that really fits what you're saying.

It might have been easier to read if the 2nd paragraph was divided into 2 paragraphs. Then you could have put the passage in italics so it's clear she's reading from the Bible.

I liked how the grandson was able to figure out what he did wrong on his own. This is a hard thing for many adult writers to do. Well done.
07/17/10
Ahh every grandparents dream to get to share with the grandchild. Good story. Blessings, Ruth
I was personally VERY blessed reading this. You portrayed your message of being doers as well as listeners in a very gentle manner. I am listening to a CD of Hymns in the background right now and the two combined into a tender masterpiece. Loved the warmth of Grandma Daniels!
07/19/10
I wish my children had a grandmother like this. Very nice story. Thank you
Nicely done.