The Official Writing Challenge
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09/13/05
What an exciting cruise! You could tighten up your writing by eliminating most instances of the word "had" in phrases like "had heard," "had struggled," and "had jolted." Nice ending.
09/19/05
Excitement and fear on your cruise, but God was in your midst. You conveyed these emotions very well in your entry. Thanks for sharing.