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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Hear (07/08/10)

TITLE: What'd You Say
By Brian Haugrud


God said don’t take but they ate fruit forbidden,
Sin entered the world, their nakedness now hidden.
God said that blood was the sacrifice for sin,
But Cain brought him veggies and therefor couldn’t win.

God said repent for the sin of your city.
Find ten who love me and I’ll show you all pity.
Turn from your evil and the sins of the flesh,
They turned to the darkness and with God would not mesh.

God said to Samson to not cut his hair.
I have given you strength and its hidden up there.
But lust of the flesh turned his eyes from his God,
He ended up blind and beaten with a rod.

God said of David, a man after my heart.
With the playing of music he had a good start.
He killed a great giant and led many strong men,
But the whispers of sin made his morals to bend.

Christ said to Peter, you will deny Me thrice.
I have given you Truth but you cowered like mice.
You could hear my strong voice but fear took control.
Through humbled forgiveness you are once again whole.

God says to us to just come unto Me.
Surender yourself if you want to be free.
But most will hear Satan as he bids them to come,
Then follow in darkness like the blind and the dumb.

So what do you hear when words have been spoken?
Do you really hear here, and step up for a token?
And then walk away not knowing what’s said,
And sacrifice lies for the Truth in its stead.

Please open your ears and focus your thought,
So when God is speaking it is not all for naught.
If you hear that for sin you will not have to pay,
When standing in judgement He’ll say “What’d You Say?”

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/15/10
This is a lovely abridged version of some of the most important stories in the Bible. I stumbled with the last line a bit. I think it was because you used say/says too close together. But you told a beautiful message and kept on topic.
AnneRene' Capp 07/16/10
Absolutely Great! I could feel the intensity within your soul from your written words.
Charla Diehl 07/16/10
Great scripture representation throughout this poetic piece. Good job.
Mildred Sheldon07/16/10
Great job in covering the subject. The poem covered the Bible perfectly and the problem we have.
Ruth Brown 07/17/10
I say ditto to other comments.
I'm so not a poet. I loved the line denied him thrice and cowered like mice! May God bless you as you write for him! Ruth
Lollie Hofer 07/19/10
Good cadence and rhyme. I also stumbled a little bit on the last line...might want to use a homonym for the first "say". Even so, the poem was well-written and had a good flow to it. Thought-provoking as well.
Dorene Lang07/19/10
Good examples of the way our nature gets in the way of our relationship with the Lord. We would rather do what we wish to do. I liked your rhyming and the word choices also.
Angela M. Baker-Bridge07/20/10
Lots of truth in so few words...well done!