The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a lovely abridged version of some of the most important stories in the Bible. I stumbled with the last line a bit. I think it was because you used say/says too close together. But you told a beautiful message and kept on topic.
Absolutely Great! I could feel the intensity within your soul from your written words.
07/16/10
Great scripture representation throughout this poetic piece. Good job.
Great job in covering the subject. The poem covered the Bible perfectly and the problem we have.
07/17/10
I say ditto to other comments.
I'm so not a poet. I loved the line denied him thrice and cowered like mice! May God bless you as you write for him! Ruth
07/19/10
Good cadence and rhyme. I also stumbled a little bit on the last line...might want to use a homonym for the first "say". Even so, the poem was well-written and had a good flow to it. Thought-provoking as well.
07/19/10
Good examples of the way our nature gets in the way of our relationship with the Lord. We would rather do what we wish to do. I liked your rhyming and the word choices also.
Lots of truth in so few words...well done!