The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a lovely abridged version of some of the most important stories in the Bible. I stumbled with the last line a bit. I think it was because you used say/says too close together. But you told a beautiful message and kept on topic.
Absolutely Great! I could feel the intensity within your soul from your written words.
Great scripture representation throughout this poetic piece. Good job.
Great job in covering the subject. The poem covered the Bible perfectly and the problem we have.
I say ditto to other comments.
I'm so not a poet. I loved the line denied him thrice and cowered like mice! May God bless you as you write for him! Ruth
Good cadence and rhyme. I also stumbled a little bit on the last line...might want to use a homonym for the first "say". Even so, the poem was well-written and had a good flow to it. Thought-provoking as well.
Good examples of the way our nature gets in the way of our relationship with the Lord. We would rather do what we wish to do. I liked your rhyming and the word choices also.
Lots of truth in so few words...well done!