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Great story from beginning to end. Very clever. However, I was distracted by the way you used quotation marks. Other than that, one of the best I've read.
The dialogue was very good and carried smoothly all the way through. The twist of irony and the angst of this teenager boy was great.
I enjoyed the your twist on a library romance. I did question a teenage girl recommending "Song of Solomon" for first reading to a boy, but maybe she was just swept away in awe by him. Good job in interjecting humor into this story and despite the quote problem, enjoyed the wording that kept the boy's language "real".
This is really exciting and set at a great pace.

I think the dialogue is a little off. i thought with many of the words the MC was using it was set in the 70s until I came on the Justin Bieber reference.

But it's still a fresh take on the topic and with a little updating some of the words would make a great article for a pre-teen-teen magazine.