The Official Writing Challenge
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06/03/10
WOW! I enjoyed this immensely. Loved how the story unfolded and the ending was superb. Loved your title because it was right on. Good job. God bless.
06/05/10
The title does fit the story very well. My attention was caught at the beginning and never let go. The ending is quite a surprise. Keep writing.
06/07/10
I wonder what he'll say to Jane when he sees her....
06/09/10
I loved the twist at the end of the story. I was prepared to hear he had killed her, but you gave it a better ending.

One problem I observed in the story is the change in tense. You switched from past to present several times.

You did a good job of showing that the editor as a real caring person.