The Official Writing Challenge
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WOW! I enjoyed this immensely. Loved how the story unfolded and the ending was superb. Loved your title because it was right on. Good job. God bless.
The title does fit the story very well. My attention was caught at the beginning and never let go. The ending is quite a surprise. Keep writing.
I wonder what he'll say to Jane when he sees her....
06/09/10
I loved the twist at the end of the story. I was prepared to hear he had killed her, but you gave it a better ending.

One problem I observed in the story is the change in tense. You switched from past to present several times.

You did a good job of showing that the editor as a real caring person.