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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: The Critique/Review (for writers) (05/06/10)

TITLE: The Choice
By Lisha Hunnicutt
05/12/10


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Jake read the editor's review. A warm feeling radiated throughout his body and he shook his head in awe. He earned the coveted stamp of approval. He jumped to his feet, "I did it!"

"At what cost?" whispered a voice.

Pushing aside the question, he raced to share his good news. "The editor loved it! I'm going to be published! A book with my name on the cover!" He grabbed his wife, swinging her in circles.

His exuberance at the good news of an accepted piece overcame his senses. "It says here they want me to make a few changes, but a book! Can you believe it babe?"

"Congratulations!" she laughed. "I knew you could do it." He gave her an affectionate kiss and headed off to call his editor.

"Good afternoon. Hardwick Publishing, Nancy speaking."

"Yes, I'm Jake Simpson calling for Mr. Walting."

"One moment please." His heart pounded nervously as elevator music filled his ear.

"Breathe," he told himself. His shoulders relaxed as Mr. Walting came on the line.

"Congratulations Mr. Simpson! I've been waiting for your call."

"Thank you sir, but please call me Jake."

"Okay Jake. Let's go over those changes."

"First of all, we like your main character, but feel that he needs more dimension or shall we say color."

"Color? What do you mean?"

"Well, he's too churchy. He needs a more rugged edge that will appeal to a wider audience."

"Okay," Jake hesitated. "What do you suggest?"

"Roughen up his personality. When he meets the new secretary, have him flirt a bit. Tell his buddy how hot she is. Throw in an expletive or two."

"An expletive? Flirting? He's a family man who loves his wife."

"I know Jake, but what man doesn't enjoy a little fire now and then? Come on. I’m not asking him to sleep with her, just some harmless flirting. It'll widen the audience. Let's move on to the daughter."

"Beth? What about her?"

"Add some teen rebellion. She could smoke some weed, sneak out a few times."

"Weed? Sneaking out? With all due respect sir, I'm a Christian author and want to stay true to the facts. This book is based on a true story. Changes like that would paint a different picture of who this family really was."

"Based is the key word here Jake. It's based on a real story, not the real story itself. Readers expect a little embellishment here and there."

"I don't know Mr. Walting. The integrity of this story is important to me."

"Well, Jake. Why don't you sleep on it and give me a call tomorrow. This is Hardwick. We can sell thousands of copies."

"Ok sir. I'll talk to you tomorrow." Jake hung up the phone with a sigh.

All night he tossed and turned, wrestling with his thoughts. "A mild expletive can't hurt can it? After all, the book does need to be real. Real people swear sometimes."

"Ephesians 4:29."

"Ephesians 4:29? Where did that come from?" He tip-toed into his office. Flipping on the light he reached for his Bible. "Ephesians 4:29. Do not let any unwholesome talk come out of your mouths, but only what is helpful…" his voice trailed off. He sighed, "Okay God."

He fell to his knees, seeking God's direction until the first rays of sunlight warmed his back. He knew what he had to do. He waited until 8:00 and gave Hardwick a call.

"Mr. Walting, thank you for selecting my book for publication, but I can't make those changes you asked for. I hope that you will still take it to publishing. I believe this story needs to be told."

"Sorry to hear that Jake. Without those changes, we just can't publish."

"I understand sir."

"This is Hardwick, Jake. You do realize what you're giving up here? If you walk out on us, you won't get another offer."

"I know. Your review is important, but there is another one that matters more sir."

"More than Hardwick? Who's more important than the top publisher in the nation?" he squawked.

"God sir. His word gives me clear direction on how to live my life, and even though it means sacrificing one of the best book deals ever, I can't compromise my faith."

Jake wrapped up the disappointing phone call and went for his afternoon jog. He needed to clear his head. As his feet slapped against the pavement, he pondered what God's review would say, and he smiled, knowing it would be one he could be proud of.


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AnneRene' Capp 05/13/10
Great story! Enjoyed the MC's inner struggle for fame versus his Christian values and thought your dialogue was great too.
Mildred Sheldon05/13/10
Loved this beyond words. It is also written you cannot be slaves of God and of money. Thank you and God bless.
Caitlyn Meissner05/14/10
What a great message! I'm glad your narrator did what was right, even if it meant sacrificing his book deal. Good job.
Kate Oliver Webb05/18/10
Good story, well-written. The song comes to mind: "I'd Rather Have Jesus...." Amen.
Catrina Bradley 05/18/10
Nice job! I like how the publisher keeps saying, "This is Hardwick", emphasizing his arrogance and building his character. The plot may be a little too predictable, but it was very well told. I like the closing line a lot! That One Reviewer's opinion is all that needs to matter. :)
Beth LaBuff 05/18/10
This is great! "The Choice" is one we can all relate to (in our daily lives). Your story held my interest thoughtout! Love this!
Sara Harricharan 05/19/10
Ah, what a choice! It seems so easy to the reader, yet in reality, what a struggle. I'm glad Jake made the right choice and he is correct--the review that matters is the one he already has. Nicely done!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/19/10
Excellent portrayal of the kind of choice a Christian should make. I'm glad you had your main character stick to Biblical principles, in spite of the struggle to do otherwise.
Lyn Churchyard05/19/10
Very enjoyable read. I'm so glad your MC stuck to his guns over his MS (manuscript). Unfortunately, some Christian authors these days don't, and are prepared to include sex, and profanity in their novels. You're comment about the review that matters more is something we should always keep in mind. Well done, I hope this does well :-)
Rachel Phelps05/19/10
Your characters were well-developed through the dialogue. I thought the plot was a little predictable, but overall, excellent work.
Mary Knoll Santos05/21/10
Ohhhh, this made me truly cry... Anything, any story of Believers standing up for Jesus and His righteousness make me cry. You gave me a new and refreshing hope for writing what God has bid me to write. You style is very good- bold, yet Christlike and full of mercy to your readers like me. I'd like to meet Jake and his family...:) I rejoice with you for placing 1st three awards. God continues to bless you as you write for Him. Amen.