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This left me longing to have been a part of this family reunion. I felt the excitement of opening that chest, I could see the ornate carving, was breathing the dust and coughing with you. But mostly, my heart was swelling with the thrill of reading those papers so packed with personal history. You left me wanting to know, who was who and what kind of intertwining's
had developed between families in that valley, AND what other treasures were in that chest!
smile, smile and smile
05/07/10
An enjoyable story.
It's hard to explain the excitement one feels when finding such a Family heirloom. You did juast that.
good job.
05/07/10
This has a lovely, nostalic feel to it.

A few notes: Your title should have the word 'Family's' rather than 'Families'. And take a look at the 4th paragraph, the sentence that starts...

Yellowed with age I gently lifted this treasure...

The way it's phrased, it reads as if you are yellowed with age, not the MS!

I loved that the mother made coffee for everyone as they explored the MS, and the reaction it caused in the valley. Very nice!