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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: The Writer’s Skill/Craft (04/22/10)

TITLE: Motive
By Rikki Akeo
04/29/10


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In Southern California where sound structures rock 'n' roll -
Nestles San Andreas Fault (a giant lacking soul).
Slumbering and tossing 'bout - until jolted awake,
Underwriters - noting risk - omit a loss by quake.
Reaching deep in pockets of those ordered to prepare, although,
Against what proves unlikely- this they cover and declare.
Naturally, disaster toward a loss-secured abode,
Conveys to these - a profit presumed flushed down the commode;
Evoke to cancellation - Translates risk in written code.

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Urgent care required in the wee hours of night,
Nocturnal pesky ailment that resists a daytime fight.
Deductible demanded as if premium taboo,
Even if the illness is as common as the flu.
Risk, again avoided through a policy inept,
Written cleverly by one ordained to be adept.
Restitution, gainfully, avoided once again,
Instead, the profit margin represented via pen.
The craft of such a writer - by exclusion or by mode,
Empties shallow pockets - if the ugly truth be told.
Rocking or a' hocking, their increase becomes twofold.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/29/10
This is a very clever poem. It was fun to read. At first I questioned if it really fit the topic, but then I got the play on words of the insurance underwriter. It's definitely an unique POV!
Mildred Sheldon05/01/10
It took awhile for my mind to wrap around this but I enjoyed this very much. Very, very clever way of handling the assignement. Keep writing.
Margaret Kearley 05/03/10
A very clever poem - some great rhymes - and quite a lot of truth!
Jan Ackerson 05/03/10
Oh, ouch! This is superbly crafted and really packs a punch!
Marilyn Schnepp 05/05/10
Clever, but lacking mention of topic. Oh well, I guess it, in itself, could be called a "manuscript", right? (I was once an insurance underwriter myself, so this brought back memories). The rhythm was a bit rocky, poetic-wise and didn't flow smoothly throughout; however, Very creative. Good job and good luck!
Marilyn Schnepp 05/05/10
Oops! My Mistake! I was thinkng "Manuscript" which was NEXT week's topic. Sorry...I apologize; Now, "Right On Target"...forgive my blunder.
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