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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Eek! (02/25/10)

TITLE: With friends like that
By Joni Andrews
03/03/10


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She was my best friend...as best as a friend could be, at the age of five.

I'll always wonder why it was me in the chair and not her.
Surely I could have wielded the scissors as well as her.

But there I sat. Hair damp, cape on-- like a natural born stylist she went to work on me. Large clump after large clump of hair dropped down by our feet onto the calf skin rug in her basement. I did not feel the least bit of trepidation or resistance. "Do with me what you will," seemed to be my stance. An attitude that definitely has not served me well. (Then or since, by the way.)

Anyway. My friend only got one side done when the babysitter (her Grandmother) caught us. Granny took one look, jumped back and let out a shriek of fright. Then she got mad. Furious, actually. She made us pick up every last one of my severed blond curls from the floor and stuff them into a garbage bag. I was sent me home, across the street, with bag in tow.

Well. You can imagine my mother's reaction.


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Jan Ackerson 03/05/10
Oh, very good!

This was charming the way it was, but I'd have loved more--you had so many more words, and this was well done.
AnneRene' Capp 03/05/10
Cute story!

Would love to be able to see a picture of the finished product! How DID your Mom respond?
Phee Paradise 03/08/10
Very funny, but I would have like to have actually seen your mother's reaction.
Marilyn Schnepp 03/09/10
I LOVE these "Short and to the Point" entries! And this hit this weeks "Eek" topic to a "T"! Such a welcome relief from long, drawn out stories that could have been told in three paragraphs. Thanks for giving us a tasty and satisfying description of an obvious "Eek" in a nutshell! (*.*)! Good Job!
Sarah Elisabeth 03/09/10
Yay, Joni, you're back! Hope things are well with you.

Very engaging piece. I don't have much in the way of red ink, other than I would love to see the fourth paragraph expanded into a showing vs. telling scene.

You're a natural writer, for sure!
Judy Wood03/09/10
Funny how a lot of kids when they get the scissors get into trouble. I enjoyed it and it reminded me of my own children and grandchildren. You might draw it out more next time. Talk about that long walk across the street and wondering what your mom would do. A good story for eek.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/09/10
I can picture every detail, even the implied ones. Very amusing.
Beth LaBuff 03/09/10
LOL! I love the way this begins, and the suspense you build. I could just see the grandmother catching these two. :)
william price03/10/10
I too like the voice. Very fresh. I wouldn't have minded reading a lil more, but this was great. I look ofrward to reading more from you. God bless.
Carol Penhorwood 06/20/11
Well told! I think I would have been that Grandma too...afraid what else they might do while under my watch! LOL