Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Join Faith
Writers
Forum
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Get Our Daily Devotional             Win A Publishing Package             Detailed Navigation

The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Eek! (02/25/10)

TITLE: The Great Hullabaloo
By K.D. Manes
03/03/10


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

A father and his son, Ray
went fishing in the Alaska Bay.
“Cast out your line, son.
Let’s catch the big one!”

So Ray cast with graceful motion.
In a matter of seconds, he felt a tug.
The pole flew upward and spun around.
“EEK,” squawked a gull, playing the thug.

“EEK,” squawked the gull,
who clung to the pole
while dad and Ray
fished in Alaska’s Bay.

Not one to give in easily,
Ray jumped high,
reaching for the pole.
Grabbing, snagging…
flinging the gull.
Wouldn’t you know,
that crazy pole caught
in a rabbit’s hole!

Crazy pole caught
in rabbit’s hole!
“EEK,” squawked the gull,
who clung to the pole
while father and Ray
fished in Alaska’s Bay.

Now rabbit bit the gull.
(Crazy pole caught
In his hole!)
“EEK,” squawked the gull,
who clung to the pole
while father and Ray
fished in Alaska’s Bay.

The vulnerable hare – quite unaware –
became a target for sly, sleuthing fox.
But upon his pounce
he felt himself bounce
and entangled in line on some rocks.

Poor fox is ensnared,
who chased the hare,
who bit the gull.
(Crazy pole caught
in his hole!)
“EEK,” squawked the gull,
who clung to the pole
while father and Ray
fished in Alaska’s Bay.

Because Ray has a kind and loving heart
and resolves to finish what he starts,
he pulled out his knife to cut the line.
but circumstance hastened him to depart.

For the gull dragged the pole
in the nearby creek,
where a huge salmon
swallowed the bait!
This story’s not done,
just you wait…

A salmon is hooked
with fox ensnared,
who chased the hare,
who bit the gull.
(Crazy pole caught
in his hole!)
“EEK,” squawked the gull,
who clung to the pole
while father and Ray
fished in Alaska’s Bay.

“It’s a salmon, Dad!”
Forgetting the hullabaloo,
Ray reeled in his prize –
if he only knew!

Standing behind them -
awaiting a taste of his own -
towered a Grizzly Bear!
His size? Full grown!

Towering Grizzly
wants the salmon,
with fox ensnared,
who chased the hare,
who bit the gull.
(Crazy pole caught
in his hole!)
“EEK,” squawked the gull,
who clung to the pole
while father and Ray
fished in Alaska’s Bay.

When the Grizzly growled, father and Ray
bee lined back to the Alaska Bay.
Neither looked behind, left or right.
They raced forward with all their might.

Father and Ray raced away
from towering Grizzly who
wants the salmon,
with fox ensnared,
who chased the hare,
who bit the gull.
(Crazy pole caught
in his hole!)
“EEK,” squawked the gull,
who clung to the pole
while father and Ray
fished in Alaska’s Bay.

An old, rugged canoe
came into view.
Twas their saving grace
in that wretched place.

It was the old, rugged canoe
that saved father and Ray,
who raced away from
the Grizzly that day;
who wanted the salmon,
with fox ensnared,
who chased the hare,
who bit the gull.
(Crazy pole caught
in his hole!)
“EEK,” squawked the gull,
who clung to the pole
while father and Ray
fished in Alaska’s Bay.

When life won’t agree with your plan
take advice from Ray, (who is now a man.)
“Often when days dawn gray and bleak,
It’s just a season your way seems oblique.
During the crazy times monuments are built,
like piecing patches on a glorious quilt.”

If you ever come visit this Alaska Bay,
read what the villagers have to say:

Town of Eek –
Named after father and Ray
because of their fortune
on an eventful day.
Despite obstacles in their path,
they “eeked” by the Grizzly’s wrath.

---------------------------------------Proverbs 20:24 – A man’s steps are directed by the Lord. How then can anyone understand his own way?


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE

JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 289 times
Member Comments
Member Date
Jan Ackerson 03/05/10
Story poems are so much fun to read!

Rhyming poetry like this usual flows better when the meter is more consistent--the same pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables in each stanza. This one felt a bit bumpy to me.

Love the title, and the action of the story.
Rachel Dorsey03/05/10

Oh, I liked this one! I could easily see this as a children's storybook, with all the action scenes on each page along with the corresponding stanzas.
Marilyn Schnepp 03/07/10
Perfect for kids delight. Not too smooth a rhyming pattern...but kids wouldn't know the difference.
Judy Wood03/09/10
A fun read. I'm sure kids would enjoy it. I did.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/09/10
This is hysterical. I laughed throughout. Now I have one more reason to want to see Alaska, to visit the town of Eek. It takes great talent to come up with something like that. Good job.