The Official Writing Challenge
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Great message!
03/05/10
Love the irony at the end!

Work a little on dialog--some of the girls' dialog sounded a little bit stiff.

This story really pulled me along, and I like your use of 'eek'.
03/07/10
Nice story, but needs a bit of editing in the grammar department; "She" insteadof "her", etc. But keep on writing, practice makes perfect. (*.*)
You weave a gentle message in your delightful tale.
03/09/10
This was great! I have felt like this so many times...