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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Ohhh…. (02/04/10)

TITLE: Choosing Life on Your Behalf
By Marijo Phelps
02/05/10


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It is the most bedraggled little thing – laying here waterlogged and soggy like a half drown kitten. Hair matted to its head, gasping for breath.

As I gaze upon it all I could think was ohhhh. Every instinct within me wants to pick it up and “fix” whatever is wrong. This little creature could die. Would I dare allow my emotions and love to get entwined with someone fragile once again? Would it respond to me? Would it live? I don’t even know if this is a “boy” or a “girl”.

I can’t help myself as I reach out to touch this little life. Of course I can’t turn away. I pick up the little one and hear a soft mewling cry. At least it is alive right now. Will it eat? What should I feed it? How did I come to find it just at this time? You are a girl!

Do I have time and energy and money for a commitment like this? It would be an incredible commitment, I do realize that….

I see those tiny blue eyes looking up at me and the minute fingers grasping at mine. If I don’t, who will?

Why are you here in this utility room? Who put you here in the dark, ignoring your very life and leaving you exposed to die?

Where is the mother who bore you, the father who brought you into being? The doctor and medical staff who pledged to support life? How could they take this terrible turn in their minds twisting things into what this has become? How can they rationalize being part of killing a human baby, innocent and never having had a chance. You are not a choice. You are a human being made in the image of God, with a life before you not to be snuffed out moments after your abrupt birth.

How can I not help? How can I possibly walk away knowing what would happen if I did. What incredible circumstances would make me NOT choose life? I don’t even want to know.


“Hey, you, what are you doing in that utility room?”

“Ohhh!”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/11/10
A different take on the ohh, but well-told with quite a bit of emotions. I felt slightly confused, perhaps if you had given more details... You're love and feelings did shine through. I can tell it is a topic that runs close to your heart.
Mildred Sheldon02/11/10
A very interesting take on the Ohhh's of life. I was drawn in to your story and now I want more. I felt your emotions and pain over the callousness of people abandoning helpless little babies right after birth. Thank you for sharing your heart felt feelings and God bless. Keep writing.
Amanda Brogan02/11/10
This is a topic that all dedicated Christians should speak out on. I like how you wrote that a baby's life is NOT a choice of the mother or doctors who brought it into the world - it is a human being made in the image of God. Very forceful! Keep speaking out on the precious God-given gift of human life.
Judy Wood02/11/10
Wow. You've given us so much to think about. Choosing life is important.How sad for those little lives that ended before they could even begin.
Rachel Rudd02/16/10
Thank you for sharing this story...I know that this happens in the world, but it's so tragic to think of it happening. I, too, wonder will happened "after the ending." :) I liked your descriptions, too. Keep up the good work!
Kate Oliver Webb02/16/10
Great descriptive writing. You drew me in and I was feeling and seeing that tiny life. I needed just a little more, too--who was in that room, who was making that discovery, who was talking?
Jan Ackerson 02/17/10
Thought provoking!

Like the other commenters, I'd love some insight into who's speaking, and what happened next.

Lots of heart-thumping suspense here.