The Official Writing Challenge
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09/06/05
A quick edit and this one is a keeper. Good flow and creative work.
09/07/05
I loved the change in your protagonist's heart. Perhaps if you made it clear early on that she was on a missions trip?
09/07/05
Attitude is everything. A great story. One thing I noticed -the putting dirty clothes on after a shower -it made me think of how we're clean after accepting Christ, but we tend to put our "dirty clothes" -old habbits -back on)
Great writing and a great message. I suspect there's a word of two missing in one of the last lines otherwise I've missed the meaning of "I’m really going to this place when I come home". Keep up th good work!
09/08/05
Good unique story. Tighten it up.
09/08/05
I was reading and thinking - where is this going, there's not much time left...but you didn't need much, the attitude shift and ending were great. God Bless, Karen
09/08/05
Too bad about the word limit - I would've enjoyed reading even more of this. Good job!
09/08/05
Really enjoyed this. I liked her "mental" postcards and then the actual one she wrote after her perspective changed. I agree, a good edit and it's good to go!
09/10/05
Hooray! A lovely story. All the suffering seems tiny after the great reward. Well done little sister.