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Well done. I want to hear more!
A very chilling story. Well told and very believable. It was well-written and very thought provoking.
What a different take on the rapture. I enjoyed this thoroughly. Keep writing and God bless.
Great past-tense telling of a future event! It will truly be THE GREAT "huh?" moment. Good creativity!
I was drawn in by the first paragraph and was not disappointed by the remaining message. Excellent!
I was drawn into your story right away. It is well written and flows easily. One thing I would have liked is to feel more of her terror. She sounded so matter-of fact about it. Great story, though.
Hopefully I'm not around to read about it when it happens!
I've wondered what "spin" would be put on the disappearance of Christians and little children after the rapture. Well thought out and written story.
Good job, a well-known future event told with a different angle. The tone was a bit matter of fact, but I could definitely see it as part of a larger work. I loved the cloud description, it gave me goosebumps.
Love stories like this and this one is both very readable and believable. It looks like you had some extra space for more words to flesh out the storyline to make it even more intriguing - but I certainly liked what you did write.
True Future tale, well written. Felt like you could have added even more description.
I, too, noticed the "matter of fact" tone, but for me it felt more like it was being told by someone whose experience that morning had left them numb, and the narrative had a rather surreal, almost eerie quality to it. Well done!
I agree with Lisa, I want to hear more!
I enjoyed the many layers to this story. Great painting with words.