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Have I told you that my mom is a fiercely independent woman that is somewhat set in her ways? - Leave off this line and just enjoy your momma while you still have her
and keep writing. Good job
01/28/10
Enjoyed your story. Personally, I liked the "fiercely independent woman" line. It revealed your understanding of the older person's need to stay independent, and it added to the flavor of the story.
I too like the fiercely independent line. It shows you respect your mom, but know her well enough to know what she's like. It was a nice story with good descriptions.
Lots of clear detail here. :) I think when writers feel confident their words have given the reader an adequate "picture", they don't find it necessary to summarize their intended meaning in the passage. Nice job, and I hope your mom is warm now.
I enjoyed reading about your independent mom. Kind of reminds me of myself. Keep writing and God bless.
02/02/10
oh... I really enjoyed your plight here. Hope it all worked out and your Mom stayed warm. :)
02/03/10
Nice bit of tension you've built into your story. Independent was fairly clear but I kept thinking an Alheizmer's diagnosis was next.
02/04/10
Hey Darlene, the highest rankings were just posted on the forums, congrats on placing 7th in Level 2! Awesome job, you can view the rankings here:

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=28619