The Official Writing Challenge
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01/21/10
A few bumps here and there but otherwise a good job.
01/25/10
Good lessons from Scripture. Good job.
01/26/10
What a precious thing--friendships between women!

I saw some comma errors--mostly missing commas. Ann Grover is currently running a class in the message boards that covers comma usage; feel free to check it out! She's very helpful.

Some of the 'oops' moments made me smile in sympathy for your narrator. Well done.