The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/10
Thank you. Trust issues are tough. Sounds as if you forgave Kay. Good.
Thank you for such a touching story. I enjoyed this very much.
01/18/10
Very good writing in this devotional.

I'd have liked to get to know the personality of Kay and the narrator a little more--perhaps more "showing" and less "telling".

I've started a class in the FaithWriters forums for Beginner and Intermediate writers. I'd love to see you there--look for "Jan's Writing Basics".

I liked the ending very much.