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a very touching story. thanks for sharing
01/14/10
A touching story indeed.
01/15/10
Nicely written. Emotional without going to the extreme.
01/15/10
Very nice. Your adjectives were well placed and brought life to the story.
01/15/10
Good writing. You used the subject to educate about pacemakers (hubby has one), show love and tenderness in a marriage, give insight to the characters, display faith and its rewards.
Very well done.
Mona
A very tender story. Thank you for sharing.
01/18/10
Great title!

I got a little bit lost at the beginning, between what was "now" and what was flashback. Other than that--well written!

I've started a class in the FaithWriters forums for Beginner and Intermediate writers. I'd love to see you there--look for "Jan's Writing Basics".

I loved these characters.