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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: It's a Colorful World (12/03/09)

TITLE: The Colors are Out and About
By Scarlett Farr
12/09/09


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Hello, what a glorious morning. The sun is shining, the temperature is not too cold, not too hot, not too humid. A great day to be in the city. Oh, pardon my manners, let me introduce myself. Iím Paula. Paula the Pigeon. This is my sidewalk and my bench. I come here every morning to people watch. I love people Ė well, I love most people. Some of them arenít very nice to me, but most are kind and they are all interesting. In fact, I think of people as a rainbow that God created. Why donít you sit with me awhile and Iíll show you the colors of the rainbow.

O look, here come two red ones. Canít you tell? Well, itís obvious, dear, by they way they are walking. They are holding hands and her head is leaning ever so slightly onto his shoulder. Their soft laughter is such a beautiful sound.

Whoa, look out, here comes a little orange one. He comes galloping past five days a week, dragging his mom in tow. He exhausts me just watching his excitement while they wait for the bus. Heís always so busy and has an endless supply of questions.

See that yellow one over there? The stand-offish one on the corner. Poor thing, sheís timid as a mouse. She never talks or makes eye contact with anyone. She even cuts a wide berth around me every morning. I believe if I were to squawk at her sheíd faint right in her tracks.

Uh-oh, here comes an interesting green one. Boy is she a talker and none too happy most of the time. She doesnít like very many people, especially people who have something she wants. She rides the bus every day but would prefer to have a fancy sports car like her boss. I donít think she likes her hair. Sheís always talking about her sisterís perfect hair. Come to think of it, I think she wants her sisterís clothes and boyfriend too.

A blue one is headed this way. Lately heís been coming to sit on the bench, staring at nothing in particular most of the time. He used to come by here every day with a woman who was very frail, but she hasnít been coming with him for the last few weeks. I miss her; she always brought me some bread or crackers to snack on.

In a few minutes an indigo one will probably join him on the bench. They usually sit and talk for awhile and then the indigo one pats his hand and moves on down the street. The indigo one started coming by after the frail one disappeared. Sometimes he will read something to the blue one from an old tattered book and then they bow their heads for a few minutes. Sometimes the blue one cries afterward.

Donít look now, but here comes a purple one. Try not to make eye contact with him. He is very loud. He likes to yell a lot. He screams at me if Iím in his way and he yells at the bus driver every morning. The yellow one wonít even cross the street if she sees him waiting for the bus. His favorite past-time is to bellow into his cell phone before the bus arrives. I donít really like purple people.

Oh my, how the time has flown. The bus is coming down the street so I guess itís time for you to leave. It was so nice to meet you. I hope youíll stop and people watch with me again some time. It is always so interesting when the colors are out and about.


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Jackie Wilson12/13/09
A very creative idea to represent the "colorful world" theme. Fun to read, good descriptions of the people.
Virgil Youngblood 12/14/09
A clever and interesting way to write about colors. The first paragraph didn't capture my attention quickly enough, but after that it was great reading. Well done.
Beth LaBuff 12/14/09
What fun! Your title is perfect! Your birds-eye-viewpoint made an enjoyable story!
Mildred Sheldon12/15/09
I loved your pidgeons eye view of people. A very interesting take on describing colors. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you. God bless and Merry Christmas.
Colin Swann12/16/09
This piece of writing is very interesting and creative - loved the pigeon-eyed view of things. Great! Colin
Aaron Morrow12/16/09
This was great fun wrapped in great writing. I totally connected with your pigeon MC and the descriptions of the different "colors" was fabulous.

One suggestion is that I think splitting the first paragraph at the introduction would have provided a smoother at the beginning.

Beautifully woven entry Scarlett, I hope it does very well. :)
Verna Cole Mitchell 12/16/09
That's one smart pigeon you have there. I liked your creative use of colors.
Catrina Bradley 12/16/09
I love the way you (I mean Paula) gave the people colors without spelling out why, but by describing them. Good descriptions, too! Clever and creative, and a good, quick pace. Thumbs up. :)
Edmond Ng 12/16/09
Interesting way of writing a story from a bird's eye view. It's certainly good to once in a while see people from a different angle. Just a suggestion, you may wish to reduce the use of the word 'one' in your story to provide smoother reading. Keep up the good work and continue to experiment different styles of writing. God bless.
Sarah Elisabeth 12/16/09
Very creative take here! I liked how you described all the "colorful" people :-)
Sarah Elisabeth 12/24/09
I'm a little late, but congrats on placing 7th!

Looking forward to seeing you back in the New Year!
Mark Kinsman02/14/10
I just joined the sight and am browsing about getting used to it. I enjoyed "the Colors are Out and About" imaginative,quick yet quite thougthfull.
Thanks