The Official Writing Challenge
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12/13/09
A very creative idea to represent the "colorful world" theme. Fun to read, good descriptions of the people.
A clever and interesting way to write about colors. The first paragraph didn't capture my attention quickly enough, but after that it was great reading. Well done.
12/14/09
What fun! Your title is perfect! Your birds-eye-viewpoint made an enjoyable story!
I loved your pidgeons eye view of people. A very interesting take on describing colors. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you. God bless and Merry Christmas.
12/16/09
This piece of writing is very interesting and creative - loved the pigeon-eyed view of things. Great! Colin
12/16/09
This was great fun wrapped in great writing. I totally connected with your pigeon MC and the descriptions of the different "colors" was fabulous.

One suggestion is that I think splitting the first paragraph at the introduction would have provided a smoother at the beginning.

Beautifully woven entry Scarlett, I hope it does very well. :)
That's one smart pigeon you have there. I liked your creative use of colors.
12/16/09
I love the way you (I mean Paula) gave the people colors without spelling out why, but by describing them. Good descriptions, too! Clever and creative, and a good, quick pace. Thumbs up. :)
12/16/09
Interesting way of writing a story from a bird's eye view. It's certainly good to once in a while see people from a different angle. Just a suggestion, you may wish to reduce the use of the word 'one' in your story to provide smoother reading. Keep up the good work and continue to experiment different styles of writing. God bless.
12/16/09
Very creative take here! I liked how you described all the "colorful" people :-)
12/24/09
I'm a little late, but congrats on placing 7th!

Looking forward to seeing you back in the New Year!
02/14/10
I just joined the sight and am browsing about getting used to it. I enjoyed "the Colors are Out and About" imaginative,quick yet quite thougthfull.
Thanks