The Official Writing Challenge
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What a story. Thank heavens for kleenex's. All it takes at times is a miraculous touch from the hand of people I call earth angels.
Nice touch! Believable characters too.
12/08/09
Tender and sweet, a very pleasant read.

Consider a re-write that replaces the "Daddy"s in the narrative with the father's name. The story would have a broader appeal, I think, aimed at an older audience.

I had a wise brown homeless man in my story this week, too!
Angel for sure!
12/08/09
Oh, Wow!! What an excellent story. I loved your characters. You did nice a job of giving them each vivd personality in such a short space.

Very, well done!!! Made me cry.
12/09/09
Excellent writing. You'll be moving on up in no time. I agree with Jan about the term 'Daddy'. I found it a bit distracting in an otherwise excellent story
12/09/09
Great entry. keep using your talents for the lord.
12/09/09
Go with those last minute ideas. It is a wonderful story.Taking a hollow hopeless dad to a new life,wonderful theme. Blessings to you! Ruth
12/09/09
Oohhh, I love Brownie! I'm glad that he showed up and that they had that encounter. Good job! ^_^
12/09/09
A lovely story that touches the heart. I like the change in the MC after the encounter. You've expressed his sense of awe and realization very well, capturing the readers' attention right to the end.