The Official Writing Challenge
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11/21/09
You had my attention from the beginning and the ending was such a surprise. Great Work!
11/23/09
What a gripping story. Once I started reading I had to finish. You held my attention from beginning to end. Thank God my kleenex's set next to my computer. Loved the ending. Thank you and keep writing.
11/24/09
Hooked me at the start too. Your portrayed seeking forgiveness, condemnation, hope, love, and faith so well, I wanted the story to continue. Very touching close. Good job and thank you for sharing.
11/24/09
Started strong and the middle was strong but the end petered out. Might have been word count, but needs a better transition in the ending. Keep writing and practicing.