The Official Writing Challenge
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Gripping story about a man that was a doer of God's word! Good writing!
11/19/09
Your story is filled with love and compassion for others through sacrifice. Good Job!
11/19/09
I wonder was this from an old folktale? Either way it is very well written and has a classic feel to it. Love the visual picture you created of henrys appearance.
11/21/09
Good story. A few typos but the content was interesting. Thanks.
I loved this story. It pulled me in and I had to find out what happened to Henry. Thank you for sharing such an interesting story and yes there is no greater gift then sacrificing ones life for another.
11/24/09
Good story line, well-written. Wonderful setting, but it might benefit for a light trimming of some of the adjectives.

Still, great storytelling.
11/24/09
Oh, I like this a lot. You catptyred the story well, and had me wondering what was going to happen next. Great job.
11/26/09
So yellow also expresses bravery and sacrifice - no cowardice here. Congratulations on the depth and brevity of your entry, and on your placing.