The Official Writing Challenge
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11/19/09
I enjoyed your very touching story. Thanks for sharing.
11/19/09
You kept my interest throughout and the surprise ending was very well written.
I enjoyed your story. It held my interest and the ending was unexpected and very touching. Thank you for sharing.
11/24/09
The jump to the father and mother was very abrupt. Not enough information about the photo is given. Before the jump the story was going nicely but the transition was not smooth. Work on that and add where the picture was taken and the circumstances. Some things cannot be left up to the reader's imagination if that is not your intent.
11/24/09
I really liked it, it would be inhanced with a little more info on the dad and photo. Congrats on being in level Two!