The Official Writing Challenge
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11/07/09
This is SO beautiful. Your descriptions are so vivid and you truly tugged at my emotions. I'm guessing you'll be in advanced before you know it.
11/07/09
A little more description of how Ilene came to the Lord would help this story. Beginning and end are pretty good, the middle needs work. Keep writing.
An even greater awareness of redemption flooded her soul. In this dirty reflection she saw the color of Christ’s blood against the white of her new spirit.
This line brought tears to my eyes. A wonderful way to show Christ's love for us. Keep writing!
Whoa! This was such a gripping story of someone being lost and then found. I loved the way you described the way she looked at herself in the mirror. This bought tears to me eyes. Keep writing.