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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Luggage (08/15/05)

TITLE: The Train Trip Pt. 2
By c clemons


Joshua was on a train too. The train he was on everyone was crying, screaming and begging the conductor to stop the train or least give them a second chance. “This train only makes one stop, no ticket needed, and where you’re going luggage is not required.” the conductor said.

It was dark and dank on the train and what Joshua saw out the window caused him to weep. He saw some people moving around like zombies and some were in chains but all were crying for release. Their faces were contorted with a look of shock, as though they could not believe they were here. One man ran to the train and asked for just one drop of cool water on his tongue. “Please” he begged, “this torment is too much.”

Joshua felt disconnected from everyone and everything he loved. Despair started seeping into his very being, joined by fear. There was anticipation here too, of something bad coming, really bad. Joshua could not believe this was happening to him, he wanted off this train NOW before whatever it was that was coming got there. He cried out to God, “Lord help me!”

A hand grabbed him from behind and pulled him off the train. He felt his body or his spirit being transported away from that terrible place. He tried to look into the face of his rescuer but all he could see was light. “Thank you, thank you!” he cried. I don’t know how I got on that train, but I’m so glad you came.”

“I’ll always come when you call my beloved.”

Romans 10:13 “For whosoever shall call upon the name of the Lord shall be saved” KJV


Joshua opened his eyes and this time he saw his mother’s face. “Oh thank you God, you gave him back to me!” she cried.

“Mom, you won’t believe what I saw and who came to save me.” Joshua croaked through the tubes in throat.

“Wait, don’t talk, let me get the doctor” his mother said as she started for the door.

“Honey!” said her husband as he burst into the room, “Adam just woke up in ICU.” He’s going to make it!”

“Joshua has too, let’s thank God right now, and believe Him for their total and complete recovery.” she said.

They prayed over Joshua and then rushed to Adam’s room to pray over him. As the days went by both boys recovered remarkably fast. The hospital put them in the same room so they could see one another. There was a noticeable change in Adam’s disposition. He smiled more and he listened intently when his parents spoke or prayed with him.

One night when the hospital was quiet, Josh overheard Adam praying, “Lord, I thank you for sparing my brother’s life, and saving my soul. I don’t know why you love me so much, but I promise from now on I will live for you, and I will tell others about you and about heaven being a real place.”

“Adam, I couldn’t help but hear your prayer, what happen to you?” asked Josh.

Adam began to tell Joshua about his experience in heaven. He was certain that Josh would not laugh but until now he had hesitated to tell anyone fearing that people would think he was crazy or vying for attention. He told him about the peace he felt and the joy of knowing how much he was loved. He told him how he had wanted to stay there forever but was told it was not his time.

Joshua could hardly contain himself when he heard about what Adam had seen. He understood now why he experienced what he had. It was never hard for Joshua to believe in heaven but he had never really considered Hell. He thought that just being a basically good person you went to heaven. He realized now that making wrong choices in life could cause you to miss heaven.

Josh told Adam about his train ride experience and what he saw there. He felt he could not accurately describe the horror and hopelessness there but he did his best. After he finished, Adam looked at him and wept. He knew it was all in God’s plan. Only Joshua could tell him of the horrors of Hell and he would believe instantly. “The boys” knelt down together and prayed.

Deut. 30:19 “…I set before you and life and death, blessing and cursing: therefore choose life…” KJV

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Rita Garcia08/23/05
Wonderful story! Blessings, Rita
Tammy Johnson08/25/05
Thanks for the conclusion. I really liked the whole story! Very nice.