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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Black (10/15/09)

TITLE: Black (i)
By Deborah Caruso


A suit and a tie
To where on a wedding day
Is prim and proper

A starless black night
In the mid bleak winter time
Is cold and itís dark

It wasnít the truth
It absolutely was not
It was a black lie

It was brewed robust
The aroma filled the air
Black coffee in cup

The reverse of white
As different as can be
Black compliments white

Funny little face
And wearing a tuxedo
Penguins waddle on

They look like a horse
But they have black and white stripes
Zebras are cooler

Black eye peas in pot
Simmering in the kitchen
Make me so hungry

She wore a black dress
But not to go partying
She was still mourning

Words printed on page
Tell about many stories
Read the newspapers

Black soil is rich dirt
It has lots of nutrients
Make tomatoes grow

Blackberry on bush
Can often be hard to pick
When they are in woods

Black hole in the sky
Has a very strong pull indeed
Light canít escape it

This spider is bad
It has eight creepy legs and
A red violin

A black cow can be
An animal on a farm
Or a nice cold drink

God sent the ravens
To a brook known as Cherith
To feed Elijah

They love Gatlinburg
It is wear they eat and play
All the big black bears

The wind is blowing
And the rain is coming down
From a big black cloud

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Ruth Brown 10/22/09
Some good thoughts on black,You did misuse the words wear and where. You probably already noticed.
c clemons10/22/09
Random thoughts on black, and you are a maverick. The instructions say not to use the topic in title but you did anyway.
Lisa Keck10/23/09
I liked these random thoughts and noticed the misuse of where and wear as well. To the comment above I think the rule is not to use the subject AS the title as oppossed to IN the title. If it's IN the title I'd be quite disappointed in the blue winners who had blue in their title. Maybe "Ink Blots" which are black as well as random.
Philippa Geaney 10/23/09
I liked the fact that you put black under the microscope and saw what you saw.
Mildred Sheldon10/24/09
Interesting way to use black and to describe the different ways it can be used.
Colin Nielsen 10/26/09
Pretty creative. Watch out for the syllable count. It is important for this series of Haiku, I think.
Good attempt though, and the subject was well covered.
Colin Nielsen 10/26/09
lol my bad. They are supposed to have 7 syllables in the second line.
Myrna Noyes10/26/09
It was interesting to read about all the black things you came up with--some positive, some negative. You had some good descriptions.
Jan Ackerson 10/27/09
A series of haiku! How wonderful!

I'd work a bit on finding ways to make your word choices lighter, not so prose-y.

I enjoyed reading these delightful tidbits--it was like glimpsing your brainstorming process.
Deborah Caruso10/29/09
Sorry for the 'wear' and 'where' mistakes on this entry, I really do know the difference, and also for using 'Black' as the title, I really didn't notice that rule.