The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/09
thank you for this interesting and varied story. I wonder if this is why houses in sweden tend to be painted red?
10/10/09
I liked the way this began with a little story, and then morphed into a devotional.

The last paragraph seemed a bit "tacked on", or perhaps it would be better higher up in the piece.

Nicely written.
10/10/09
I have always wondered about the Red Barn of America. I found my eye flowed easily across your words. I enjoyed them.
An enjoyable story to read. I wanted to know the outcome of "deep trouble" when Mom found you misbehaving. Good writing.