The Official Writing Challenge
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10/10/09
Good job of exploring your characters' emotions.

I felt a little bit lost, as if there was a lot of back story that I didn't know. This almost read like a chapter of a longer work. Not sure of how the title works with the story, either.

I love the open ending...it made me want to turn the page and read more.
10/12/09
Nicely done . Liked the dialogue.