The Official Writing Challenge
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A nicely written article, I felt the emotion at the end. Watch your tenses though.
10/08/09
Very well done. I loved the voice of the main character and the personality he brought to the story.
10/09/09
Well-done...I especially liked the voice in the first third or so. Spunky and interesting narrator.

Avoid exclamation points whenever possible, especially in narrative.

This was a good read.