The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/09
Lots of feeling in so few words. It would be powerful in poetry form.
10/09/09
I agree that this piece contains "seed" for a potentially powerful poem! There was a lot of feeling expressed in these few words and much truth as well. I liked the hopeful, positive ending! Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us!
10/09/09
Lots of strong emotion here!

I'd suggest a more compelling title, and a beginning sentence with more of a unique hook.

Keep writing, find ways to expand on your initial thoughts, and thanks so much for this entry!
10/13/09
I agree with the previous commentors, so much emotion about a color. Needs fleshing out a bit, if this is your feeling defend it, because right now it's still just a color to me.