The Official Writing Challenge
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09/18/09
Obviously something to be continued. A couple of places the change up was abrupt, required re-reading which you don't want your reader to do too many times.
09/18/09
Very good descriptions & you painted a peaceful portrait of both retirement/empty nesters life, liked your comparison of the gulls nest to the characters life,I found the piece flowed smoothly just like the sailing.