The Official Writing Challenge
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09/15/09
wooo! very atmospheric! You description of the tettering on theedge of the cliffsand thewaves was so amazing and I was right therewith him. I found the second part from wherehe threwaway the phone more bitty and so difficut to engage with. Itis as if you had a much longer story to tell....... I think it could beexpanded into a whole book! I loved the last line aswell which was neat.
I think the character seemdto beateenagerratherhan a child.
Thank you so much for a greatread!
09/15/09
Heavy duty story. Good descriptions on the ledge. Glad for a happy ending.
09/16/09
You have a wonderful story. As I read, I found myself wondering what he was going to do. Was he going to go with the doctor or not? The suspense was great.