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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Sightseeing (08/08/05)

TITLE: *I REALLY TRIED, BUT I CAN'T THINK OF A GOOD TITLE FOR THIS
By h o'hara
08/10/05


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The bags, they have been packed

for quite some time now.

Amazed at how different the second

journey around may be,

and startled

at the water

now swirling beneath me.

Not noticing this the first time,

but now there is no escaping.

This time around,

I call the shots

and walk on the water

I rain.

The directions now I hear are mine

as I beckon to wait for

what lay over this mountain

of flesh so weak, and spirit willing.

A mountain

I beg the good Lord moves,

and moves quickly.

For now, I am in my own way,

And can't see

You, the most beautiful thing

that I ever saw,

all of what pain

fell at my feet

all of what love created, and

all His blood had bought.

Oh, that you will see

When your sin swirls around you

don't allow yurself to

get in your own way,

pray for the mountain to move

and let go, let yourself

be born again

to take the second journey

through the water.

Now that you finally got here

an absolute beauty,

A sight for sore eyes,

(And a few other every things, truth be told)

With your new fingers and toes, tiny and tenů

I pray that you will pray to

The God who saves,

that has descended


which is what we have named you

little one...

Joshua Jordan


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Shari Armstrong 08/15/05
"This Time Around" or "Second Time Around"?? are what came to me for a title :) I had to read this twice it was so good! (our 2nd is Joshua also :)
Phyllis Inniss 08/17/05
Joshua Jordan would have been a good enough title.
Quite a good entry.
Shirley Thomas08/17/05
Good work. I have a Joshua also. Thanks for sharing your talent.
c clemons08/18/05
Guess I am limited, I could not pull it together and understand what you were trying to get across.
Katherine Douglas08/18/05
I didn't understand the message either. I felt it was unclear