The Official Writing Challenge
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What a sad heart breaking story of dispair and hopelessness. The cold winter setting even makes this a sadder story
08/20/09
Oh, gosh, somebody needs to stop her! A cliffhanger ending, for sure!
08/24/09
Oh dear - Lord save people like this - really sad! Thanks for sharing, the reality of life for some. Colin
Very well written with a supposed heartbreaking end.
08/24/09
Compelling story that peaks interst and drives the reader to keep reading.
Creative. Tugs emotions.
Mona
08/24/09
You leave a little room for hope at the end...hope that he comes home early, hope that she is stopped by something. Very compelling writing!
08/24/09
Very engaging drama...I kept trying to figure out a way to help this woman...You kept me reading and wanting to know at the end what would happen next.
Sounds like this would be a great beginning to a longer story. Good hook, makes me really want you to keep writing so I can find out what happens next!