The Official Writing Challenge
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I really enjoyed this story...very touching. It is in the little things, like a smile, that we can understand so much.
08/06/09
A beautifully written story. I think it stands well on its own, without the note at the end. Just my opinion. Good job.
08/11/09
Beautifully written piece filled with sentiments.
08/11/09
In my opinion, this entry does NOT belong in intermediate! GREAT writing, original idea, spot on topic, and a story that grabbed me and held my interest til the last line. I'll be surprised if this doesn't place.
:) Cat
08/12/09
I agree with Cat...this is a very well-done story. Caught my attention and held it. Great work!
Mona
Love blossoms when we see the vulnerability of the other. What a powerful message. This is so well written and held my attention throughout. I especially liked this keen observation given by the MC: "I remember my mother’s tears of joy at the matchmaker’s announcement. I cried too, some from joy, some from fear, some from an indefinable feeling of loss. I was truly an adult now."
It says a lot about the author and their insights into human emotions.
08/12/09
Ohh-WONDERFUL! I love the details in here, and especially the voice of your MC, it's just perfect! The touch of romance made this into a truly enjoyable read. Great job!
Well done on an excellent entry.