The Official Writing Challenge
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07/23/09
I really liked you article. It was so honest and very endearing!
07/24/09
A sweet story. Good writing.
07/26/09
thank you. Well written. I got a little confused with the first paragraph being adressed to the reader in the second person and preferred the I..... when it strated. I think you got into the emotions and angst of a teenage boy well and liked the descriptions of his appearance. I liked the humourous style too.
07/26/09
Your story has a great voice. I love the attention to trivial detail that is so typical of that age group. Also some great use of appropriate language.
I wasn't sure about the Guns'n Roses reference when the episode was presumably set about forty years in the past. (Maybe the Beatles?) But the sudden transition from teen to old man made for a terrific comparison with today's youth and their preoccupations.
07/27/09
Good writing!
Truly lovely story. I loved it. Well done.