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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Adolescence/Teen Years (07/16/09)

TITLE: I Promise, I'll Be Good
By Brenda Welc
07/19/09


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Are they looking at me? Is my hair alright? I am so sleepy. Last night was so rad. Amazing Grace how sweet the sound.... I think I may have had a little too much to drink, hope mom and dad donít find out where I was. That saved a wrench like me..... Taceyís Iíll tell them, sleep over, yeah thatís what Iíll say. Not another hymn, I canít stand up much longer. On a hill far away....my legs are like jell-O. Old rugged cross......Yeah that reminds me, jell-O, jell-O shots are awesome! I will cling to the old rugged cross......Wonder what kinda alcohol was in Ďem. Canít wait till this is over....sleep...nap....rest....snoozing til dinner........



Hello? Where am I? Just a minute ago I was in church singing, well pretending to I guess. Can we turn some lights off? Itís way too bright in here, itís hurting my head. What is that sound? What? Angels? Do I hear angels? Okay where am I, am I dead? I promise it was only two drinks and a few jell-O shots, nothing much. I am almost 17, surely I can handle a little alcohol without overdoing it! I donít wanna die. I wanna live. I will never drink again. Hello? Anybody there? God, is that you? I swear Iím gonna scream! Okay, if this is the way itís gonna be them Iím leaving. I am clicking my heels together three times and leaving this place....One..Two..Three...Thereís no place like home....thereís no place like home....


ďYou are home childĒ


So I am dead? Iím really gone? What will my parents do without me? No one to worry about and take care of. Wait, no more parties? No more hangní with friends? I wanna go back. I promise Iíll pay attention in church. Iíll even be good during the week. No more pretending to be a Christian, Iíll really be one this time. I know I was bad before but I will be committed to You this time! For real! Thatís it, Iíll tell all my friends about you, yeah like spread the gospel like in the Bible. I promise, I will change for You! Just give me one more chance. Forgive me.....please....okay, no more drinking until Iím twenty-one....no more lying to my parents.....no more dating crummy boys just for the attention.....I promise! Please let me live. Let me go back and start over. I am not ready to die.


ďGo now in PeaceĒ


Yes mom, I am awake, stop tapping me on the shoulder. Yes the pastors sermon was good. Another hymn to sing, wonderful! I love singing these songs.....Then sings my soul, my savior God to thee... this is great...another chance to live for God. I will keep my promise to Him. I will walk the straight and narrow path just like pastor said to do...My savior God to thee... I will attend every church event I can just so I can walk more closely with Him....How great thou art, how great thou art.



Whatís that? Oh my phone is still on vibrate. Itís Tracey, wonder what she wants...party this Friday? Oh yeah, Iíll be there! I can ask for forgiveness for my actions on Sunday. Iím sure God will understand! Wonder if Joey will be there, he really likes me! Iíll call him right after I sleep off this hang-over. Itís so great to be alive!


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Lisa Johnson 07/23/09
That is so true of this generation...believing themselves to be invincible, and thinking they have all the time in the world to repent...after they have fun.
Sad.
Seema Bagai 07/24/09
Wow. One twist after another in this piece. Good writing.
diana kay07/27/09
I can really hear and relate to the teenagers voice here!
Norma-Anne Hough07/29/09
So very true of so many of us. We want the fun, we want to have it all, its so easy.
Well written.
Eddie Snipes07/29/09
Sounds like many people I have met over the years. It's easy to promise, but the flesh is weak.
Norma-Anne Hough07/31/09
Well done on placing tenth.
lol Norms