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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Adolescence/Teen Years (07/16/09)

TITLE: ANGELICA
By Allan Morelos
07/18/09


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ANGELICA

This new round queen size bed is just perfect for me. How sweet-smelling is its lilac-scent! Mmmmmmmmm. So soft. Comfortable. As pleasantly refreshing as this Sunday evening springís fragrance. Whatís the most comfortable angle here? Let me try this one. Face down; flat on my tummy? My abs, my breast, yeah, my face tingle with the warmth and baby-powder freshness of this bed. I love this bed!

Whereís my giant Hello Kitty? Ah, it fell off. Iíd better reach it before Blossom, my white and chubby cat, takes a snooze on it. Stretch. Stretch. A little bit mooooore. Gotcha!

Hello, my Hello Kitty! You feel just like my best friend, Heather. Let me give you a hug. Howíd you like my smooches on your tummy-tummy? Ummph. Aaaah. Again? Okay, again. Ummmph. Aaaaaah. One more time. Ummmmph. Aaaaaah. Thatís fun.

You know what, my Hello Kitty? Your marshmallow softness reminds me of the smooth and shiny satin dress Heather wore this morning at church. She looked so elegant. And classy. But why did she say I looked like a bum with the hooked silver ring on my navel? It looks great to me! I feel good about it too. Rob, that tall, dark and rugged handsome brother of hers, doesnít like it either. Yeah, yeah. Rob is cute. And wonderful. So what?

Ouch! Whatís under this pillow? Oh, my thick history book. I know. I know. Unit test from pages 87 to 95 tomorrow. Yes sir. Iíll do that. But I just canít remember the dates. Confederates. Union soldiers. General Grant. Appomatox. Who cares? If Iíd be a successful supermodel one day, who needs General Lee? My classmates are just envious of me. Theyíd say Iím like one of the dumb blonde girls they knew. Even though Iím no blonde. And Iím certainly not that dumb.

Iíll roll over here to see myself on the huge oval mirror opposite my bed. See? Ainít I beautiful? No wonder theyíre envious. Iíd better come closer to the mirror. Look at that. Now I know why my English teacher said that Iíve got a face that could launch a thousand ships. And whatís this? Gee, a pimple. Yuckie. No, donít panic. Youíre still okay.

Heather said that Iíve got the breast of the goddess Venus, too. Itís my hooked silver ring on my navel that she didnít like. But I love it! I love it. Iím different. Right? I should be different. Beautifully different! Aaaaah, I love this bed.


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Lisa Johnson 07/23/09
Interesting how you show the conflicting emotions of someone not quite a child, but not quite grown yet. Loved the contrast between the "Hello Kitty" and the navel ring.
Dee Yoder 07/25/09
It is a narcissistic age of life. And you captured those feelings well, especially the way girls think!
Brenda Welc07/27/09
Interesting,,,,VERY interesting. It's exactly like the inards of a teenager!
Norma-Anne Hough 07/29/09
Good one with some lovely little insights.