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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Adolescence/Teen Years (07/16/09)

TITLE: to my daddy in heaven
By Margaret Villanueva
07/16/09


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who am i?
i used to be a child named sophie.
i loved my name,
it made me feel like a butterfly.
i was happy, without cares
and then i started developing
and my stepfather noticed.

iím sixteen now.
they still call me sophie
but the name doesnít fit me anymore.
i try to hide myself behind clothes that are too big for me,
but he still sees me.
i spend lots of time in my room,
but he still finds me.

should i talk to my mother?
heís told me not to.
heís said that i shouldnít make her choose between us.
and besides,
she loves him.
iím afraid to speakó
if itís a choice between him and me
iím afraid heíll win.

thereís only one place where i feel free
in my dreams.

In my dreams, I come alive
Because Iím with you.
With you I am once again Sophie,
The butterfly.
I fly with you in Heaven, Daddy,
And I know you would never hurt me
Like he does.

but then i wake up
and heís here
and youíre not.

you told me about god, Daddy.
you told me he loves me.
could you please tell him to come to this awful place
and free me?

i want to be sophie again


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Lisa Johnson 07/23/09
touching, poignant
Norma-Anne Hough 07/23/09
Very moving. Horrible that these things happen to innocent children.
Beckie Stewart07/24/09
This was my story....from 7th grade until 9th when I came forward and told my mom...who believed my stepfather who denied it. It took many years, but praise the Lord the Great Physician healed me from the scars left from that experience.
Scarlett Farr 07/24/09
I am not really a fan of poetry but this one captured my attention from the first line. You told a harsh reality very well.
diana kay07/25/09
ahh this is good. t is told in a very childlike way that seems to be a much younger child than a 16yr old. Maybe this was deliberate. I think maybe an early teen would be more likely to "speak" like this
Brenda Welc07/27/09
You made me cry, I am a product of this you write about it. Must have been how my mom felt during those times, it was even a step-dad.

Very good writing, you got to the heart of this reader.
Allan Morelos07/30/09
This is so sad yet true in a number of cases. How evil destroys people's lives!

Indeed only the gospel of Christ can turn things around. Thanks for sharing this with us. It's an emotionally-loaded piece. Great job!