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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Summer (the season) (07/09/09)

TITLE: Onward and Forward
By Janeil Harricharan
07/15/09


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“Hey, come on!” A voice yelled.

I grabbed a suitcase and a duffel as I ran out of my house to a Toyota RAV4 that my friend that named “Midna”. Pri was sticking her head out the rear passenger’s side window, motioning for me to come.

The rear door was popped open as I threw my luggage in, and hopped into the backseat, Pri scooting over to give me room. I locked the door as everyone else greeted me.

Nick, Michaela, Pri, and Malibu all told me hi as I buckled my seat belt and returned the greeting. Malibu pushed down her sunglasses and put the soundtrack from the “Incredibles” to play.

“And off to Florida we go!” Malibu stuck her fist out her window before winding it up and placing Midna into gear.

Though not my everyday friends, they were some of the few friends I had. All of them hailing from North Carolina, Malibu had moved to Atlanta as time went by. Nevertheless, we got together every several months to spend time since our “first contact” was very random, and it led up to such a great relationship.

“So, we get to go to Disney World, Sea World, and the Space Center.” I said.

“And we go scuba diving off Key West. I can’t wait!” Pri exclaimed, bouncing in her seat. Twenty, she earned the nickname of “Our little hyperactive Indian.” She was small, tons of fun, and very random.

“First we must get there.” Malibu started to leave the backwoods of Tennessee which I called home and head to the Interstate. “And hopes that our trip does not get messed up by rawr.”

“Gosh, Malibu. I can’t believe you got so much time off.” Nick had the front seat. He worked at Chik-Fil-A, and went to school for Graphics Design. His girlfriend, Michaela, did about the same thing, except she worked at GameStop.

“Rawr is so overrated.” Michaela answered, playing Trauma Center on her Nintendo DS.

We all had many things in common. I was happy to share with them, spend time with them, and discover new things with them. I held precious the time we had together. Deep down inside, I sort of regretted that our time was cut short by distance and life.

Though my trip only happened in my imagination, summer always stuck in my head as a time to get together with friends to go on an adventure, whether it was halfway across the country, or right in my own backyard. To learn about the world around us, to keep each other company, to get to know each other a little better, and to have some decent fun, all at the same time. Maybe one day it would happen for real…


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diana kay07/17/09
interesting twist in the discovery that this was just a trip in the imagination. It sounded so real.
I just found that for me there were too many characters in the car and this confused me. I think it would have worked just as well with slightly fewer people to describe.
Mildred Sheldon07/18/09
I was caught by surprise at the ending. I was all set to go to Florida and enjoy the trip. Very interesting take on summer.
Laury Hubrich 07/22/09
I hope you get to have many adventures. I started having real adventures at 45 so it's never too late.

I would say this part you are describing our Sara: "Pri exclaimed, bouncing in her seat. Twenty, she earned the nickname of “Our little hyperactive Indian.” She was small, tons of fun, and very random." -- Am I right?

Keep on writing and make up those adventures on paper and hopefully they will soon come true!
Seema Bagai 07/22/09
The beginning was great. I was hoping for some more description of the road trip, even if it was imaginary. Those details would have strengthened the piece. Then, the ending could have been wrapped up in one sentence. Good work.