The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoy "westerns" and the picture you painted of the cowboy life. I would have liked a clue about the time frame; most round-ups today are a little different in regard to meals. Good job.
I love a good western story and this was exceptional. I wouldn't want to herd cattle during the summer months but if that is what you like then go for it. Very well written.
07/20/09
You have a good start with this story.

Red ink: The last two paragraphs dragged and rambled. Maybe you could have shown the MC doing things and thinking aloud or even talking to his horse. Break them up with some action or dialogue and this will be a stronger piece.

I could see this being part of a longer story of Sigel's adventures.