The Official Writing Challenge
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02/02/05
Good points in your story but too much on the short side. You could have expanded on it beautifully with more of a setting to give us a picture of the surroundings. You did well with the emotion. Haphazard use of tenses, punctuation, and word splits that should be together ie. whatever.
02/03/05
Forgiveness....the great conductor of peace. Nice job of showing us the peace we receive when we allow God to work forgiveness in our heart.
I would have liked to seen more on this story. Thank you and God bless you.