The Official Writing Challenge
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Good points in your story but too much on the short side. You could have expanded on it beautifully with more of a setting to give us a picture of the surroundings. You did well with the emotion. Haphazard use of tenses, punctuation, and word splits that should be together ie. whatever.
Forgiveness....the great conductor of peace. Nice job of showing us the peace we receive when we allow God to work forgiveness in our heart.
I would have liked to seen more on this story. Thank you and God bless you.