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06/04/09
Liked the story. If you'd shortened the title to "Pink Lipstick in a Pine Box", the smile would have been more a surprise.
06/04/09
Great job with the setting, both time and place.

Sorry to make another comment about the title, but I think it sets the wrong mood for this quiet and sweet piece. I was expecting humor.

This was lovely, simple, gentle.
06/06/09
Good poignient peice. I was a bit put out when effie suddenly arrived at the end. She seems somehow to intrude. I also agree that the title does not really work with the peice although it is certainly eye catching
06/07/09
Such a touching story. Thank you for such a tender story. Life does have bitter moments and sweet ones that take your breath away.