The Official Writing Challenge
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05/28/09
I had a child just like that!

I think you could leave off the last paragraph, and trust your readers to 'get it', rather than telling them 'the rest of the story'.

I could sense your empathy for this scared little one.
Touching story many can relate to. Raising 3 children we faced this many times. I was empathetic since I still have tendencies to feel a little uncomfortable in complete darkness-unless I'm not in the room alone-then darkness is welsomed necause I sleep better in it then without it.:0) Nice job of describing the small boy's dilemna and his uderstanding mom. Believable dialogue. Keep writing!:0)God bless!!