The Official Writing Challenge
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05/28/09
Isn't it wonderful how God works?

I think that with less dialogue and more description, your readers would be better able to identify with your characters.

Very sweet ending.
I love that God placed Mary and Emma together. Thanks for bringing the plight of older children in the adoption system to the forefront.
05/31/09
Good job with this topic. God does work things out for all His children.
A little more "showing" and not so much "telling" allows the reader to feel more involved with the characters.
I loved this story. It caught me at the beginning and carried me all the way through. Thanks for writing this inspiring story.