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08/08/05
This entry brought tears to my eyes. A beafutiful picture you've created here of love, hopelessness, and the pursuit of finding life again to live. Thank you!
Good twist with finding out halfway through the story that Michele was alive. Good job!
I liked this! What a beautiful ending to a sad beginning. :) Thanks for sharing!
08/10/05
Good entry. 'When he continued to lie on the floor' when I thought he was still upright, confused me as a reader.
It is a sweet commentary but I don't see the relationship to retreating? Was Michele retreating from life by taking her life? Nonetheless, I enjoyed the story. Blessings
08/11/05
Good story - watch out for the compounding of adverbs - I liked the pace of this work.
I guess I assumed too early that she had died - what a relief! I was encouraged by their joint confession and submission to God. Good job.
Only yesterday I learnt that someone I knew had commited suicide - she didn't have a second chance. I was pleased however when I realised you had given Michele a second chance, and how wonderful to know that we all have a second chance because of Christ's sacrifice. Thanks for sharing and for tackling a difficult topic.