The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved this line: "If you need to look for perfect look instead only at me." We all need to remember the only one perfect is indeed the Lord. God bless you.
There is a lot of great truth here. The format of the poem obscures it a little. I think it would be stronger if broken up into stanzas.

I also thought the best line was, "if you need to look for perfect look at me." I really enjoyed your conclusion. It was real-life. Things weren't magically 100% okay, but the couple was on the road to better. A very good entry.
02/06/05
Nice entry and great truth!
02/06/05
Nice entry. A few mistakes in your punctuation/word choice check. Good realistic ending.