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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Anger (01/24/05)

TITLE: The story of how anger almost won


Once there was young lady
Full of dreams and light
She thought she met her knight in shining honor
She thought he was a product of the light
But then the courtship ended and the real life began
His fists they never hit her, but the words she couldn’t stand
She first tried to do something
Scream and yell-- fight back
To explain to him a little
You don’t have to talk so harshly
It puts me in a shell
But his anger wouldn’t listen
His betrayal was on its way
She thought he was a product of the light
What happened here she thought
How could I have been so wrong
She prayed to God for guidance
Then God had this to say
To her he said simply, "Pray,
pray for your husband everyday
I am your one true savior
let nothing block the way.
I will hold you my child
I will sustain you as you pray."
To him he spoke more subtlety
"Son, take me by the hand
You’ve lost your way a little
Come THIS is the way to the promise land
While you thought you sat in darkness
I’ve held you day by day
Waiting for you to see me
Wanting you to take my hand
This wife of yours is not perfect
But no one is you see
If you need to look for perfect
look instead only at me
She is praying for you now son
and you’ve bruised her to the soul
Yet still she prays for you son
and with our help she’ll heal
She doesn’t want to leave you
but flee she will--not stay
If your anger doesn’t burn out
You must choose a different way
It’s okay to be angry,
but take it up with me instead
I will love you always
And Your words can hurt me, yes,
but there’s no use yelling at the one
on THIS world that loves you best
She’s a special gift I gave you
She’s your one true love
With her on your side and beside you
wars and battles can be won"
So now its a lot better
But the story isn’t over
the story just began
That girl she listened to her father
And she prayed everyday for her man
The boy, he still gets angry
And sometimes he still yells at her,
but he also consults his father
He also remembers her worth
So they are on the road again
The road to the promised land

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Deborah Anderson02/05/05
I loved this line: "If you need to look for perfect look instead only at me." We all need to remember the only one perfect is indeed the Lord. God bless you.
Debbie OConnor02/05/05
There is a lot of great truth here. The format of the poem obscures it a little. I think it would be stronger if broken up into stanzas.

I also thought the best line was, "if you need to look for perfect look at me." I really enjoyed your conclusion. It was real-life. Things weren't magically 100% okay, but the couple was on the road to better. A very good entry.
darlene hight02/06/05
Nice entry and great truth!
Sally Hanan02/06/05
Nice entry. A few mistakes in your punctuation/word choice check. Good realistic ending.