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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Before and After (05/14/09)

TITLE: Tomorrow's Eve
By john garner
05/20/09


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“Son, what do you think of all we’ve made? Are we missing anything?”

The boy thought for a minute as he bent down and found a good flat skipping rock to throw. The crystal clear lake ran almost up to the cabin’s back porch and he could easily hit the water from there. “Oh, it’s great, Pop. What’s next? Let’s do something fun. Did you see that? Seven skips.”

“The sky’s the limit, my boy, you name it and we’ll do it.” Not too many dads were brave enough to make an offer like that, but this one truly loved his son and was ready to back up his promise.

“Well, Dad, we really do have it all here, you know. The trees especially, I could sit up in the highest branches and sway with the cool breeze forever. Of course, the squirrels might object and the raccoons, owls and every other bird in existence seem to all come by for a look at me, but I like the company. I loved the warm sun this morning that took the chill off when I caught that mess of fish for breakfast but lying out under the stars and that full moon last night was the best.”

“Sounds like it’s just about perfect then, except the pups really go crazy when you’re up in the tree so long. Then, they get into the tomatoes and okra and corn; always getting into something when you’re not there. Nothing like good companions who stick with you through thick and thin, you know.”

“I suppose, but they get along together even without me. Guess they’ll be having pups of their own someday. Anyway, Pop, looks like there’s nothing else we need. Wanna take the boat out before it gets dark?”

“Sounds good, but let me get these dishes washed up first. Go ahead and get her ready and I’ll meet you at the dock.”

There wasn’t the slightest breeze and the lake reflected the moon and stars as twilight set in. The two men just sat in silence for the longest time, as guys do, admiring the bright orange fireball as it appeared to dip into the water on the horizon. Then came the serenade of the crickets and locusts and whippoorwill and the flickering flashes of the lightning bugs.

“Guess we better head back in, Dad, I’m getting sleepy.”

“I’ve got an idea for tomorrow, son, and I think it might be something you might really like.”

“Oh yeah? What’s that?”

“Something new. It’s the one thing you’re missing, but it’ll be a surprise, so don’t try and guess or stay up wondering. You’ll need your rest, I can promise you that.”

“Well, I’m so sleepy now I don’t think anything could keep me awake. Can’t wait to hit that bed.”

“Why don’t you head on in then and I’ll take care of securing the boat and finishing up. Have a good night’s sleep, see you in the morning.”

“Yeah, you too. Good night.”

It was the dawn of a new day, one that the boy will measure all of his days against. He hadn’t even removed his clothes before hitting the bed and felt a little soreness where his belt buckle must have rode up on his side, but he couldn’t wait to get up and see what wonderful idea his dad had cooked up. As he rolled over to put his feet on the floor, he had the feeling someone was in the room but he could see his dad at the stove making breakfast.

“Hey, Pop, what’s the surprise? I can’t wait.” Then he almost jumped out of his skin when he heard a high pitched giggle from behind him in the bed. “Ayyyyy! What the…who are…how did you…where did you? Dad! Come here, quick! Holy cow!”

“Surprise, son, I’d like you to meet Eve. Eve, I’d like you to meet my son, Adam.”

“But Dad, how did you do it? Where’d she come from?”

“I took a rib from your side where you are sore and her flesh came from yours. She is the completion of all of my creation and the mother of all that is to follow when you leave this place. Now I will leave you alone to get acquainted. I hope you got plenty of rest last night. My work is finished, so I’m going to sit on the back porch and take a long restful nap.


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Jan Ackerson 05/21/09
Fun update of Genesis, and I love the pun in the title.

I was thrown for a bit when you once refered to Adam as a man (the two men in the boat), and another time as a boy (getting into bed).

This was very visual--I got a kick out of it.
Mary McLeary05/22/09
Great example of "the love of the Father is visited upon the Son." I liked the easy relationship between them. Good job.
Janice Fitzpatrick05/22/09
I liked the love between the father and the son and wondered after the first paragraph if it was about God and Adam. I:0) I liked the way you had Evwe creeping into bed with a suprised Adam and the reply from their heavenly father. Godo job!!This gave me a grin. (I was just a little confused when the boy was referred to as a man but other than that this was cleverly written!!!:))